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Rating: PG-13
Summary: The young shop assistant is really annoyed by now - why is he always being pushed aside by his employer whenever the blond man enters the shop? Perhaps an old lady can enlighten him today?
A/N: *is still totally floored about invite* This is an older ficlet of mine which I rewrote a bit for posting it here.
The shop assistant had withdrawn into a corner, his obvious attempt not to sulk betraying his youth. Despite an amused twinkle in her eyes, the old lady who had been observing him for quite some time, smiled gently at him. "Is Madama Fiorella giving you a hard time?"
"She never allows me to attend to him," he pouted, yet blushed at being so easy to read. "He has to be very wealthy; maybe that's why she's so eager to- I mean," he stammered, horrified that she might suspect him of speaking ill of his employer or, even worse, of spying on customers. "I only g-guessed, because of his demeanour, his appearance. Oh, I'm not - I'm just thinking about this. W-wondering. I m-mean, you'd expect someone like him to buy something really special, really expensive. And we've got such magnificent offers right now - here, take a look at these orchids, they're enchanted to sparkle when being approached, or these bellflowers, they actually are sounding like-" Realising that he had involuntarily withdrawn to the safe grounds of reeling off this week's advertising speech, he bit his lips in embarrassment, his cheeks turning an even deeper shade of crimson.
Although she apparently had to try hard to stifle a grin, the old lady gave the boy a reassuring nod. Her eyes, though, never left the tall, slim, almost gaunt figure of the blond man who, simply by raising a pale eyebrow, made a submissive Madama Fiorella rush back into the stockroom over and over again, present flower after flower to him - all of which he had been refusing so far by a nearly imperceptible tilt of his pointed chin.
"So, he doesn't live up to your expectations?" the lady asked, the tone of her voice light and her hands plucking at her concrete-like white bun, but her dark eyes brimming with emotions the boy wasn't sure he could read, sad and wistful yet tender and- caring?
"No-oh. He really looks like being able to purchase the whole shop on a mere whim. But no, nothing enchanted, nothing extraordinary for him; it's always only one single red rose - though, he insists on- no, he doesn't insist, doesn't have to, it's just- See, you wouldn't dare, wouldn't eventhink of anything but get him the most beautiful one. I'd really," and with a sudden outburst of confidence he leant closer to her, "really like to know who he is. He's so. So. Just have a look around, it's always like that, whenever he enters, he immediately attracts everyone's attention but seems to be totally unaware of-"
He stopped at hearing her draw a deep breath, almost a gasp. And when she spoke, her voice sounded almost harsh, offended. "What do you mean, you would like to know who-?" She broke off, fumbled briefly with her square glasses and reached out to pat his shoulder. "Oh, no, no. I'm sorry, boy. No, of course, you wouldn't know who he is, you're far too young. Haven't seen him for years myself, actually. I don't know- I wonder for whom he's buying- oh, maybe..." gradually, the old lady's voice had become lower, softer, as though she were talking to herself, "After all these years. God, I so hope that he's overcome- that he's finally beginning to-"
But when the man went by - as oblivious to her presence as to the murmurs and glances of the other customers - she caught sight of the shimmering ribbon which was wound around the green stalk of the red rose.
Imprinted letters, shining silver on golden silk.
The old lady fell silent, holding her breath, her right hand pressed onto her quivering mouth. Exhaling deep, she lowered her head, closing her eyes as if in pain.
Our love lasts forever.
January 17 2006, 20:01:45 UTC 6 years ago
I love the way you've, well, put together a story with some elements without stating what those elements are. I simply love the variable quality of it - anyone can read what they want to, make out of the ficlet exactly what they want to. And the best part? The real story is one which you've cleverly NOT written - the unsaid, unknown but hinted at piece. I love this kind of writing - or story-telling, if you'd rather - because it invites me - as the reader - to participate in the entire process of the fic, almost to the extent of the you - as the writer.
And congratulations on making the grade XD
♥
January 18 2006, 20:28:38 UTC 6 years ago
This is exactly what I was aiming for - to trigger the reader's fantasy; and that you had the impression of actually being invited to participate - I think this is the best compliment I got for this fic. *resumes snuggling* I'm a total sucker for the telling-a-story-by-telling-another-story style (tried to do it with "Borrowed Times" as well), and I love playing with estranged POVs... (apart from the fact that I originally wrote this for the "Valentine's Day" challange at
♥
January 21 2006, 12:17:26 UTC 6 years ago
January 23 2006, 22:05:14 UTC 6 years ago
Wow, this is... *babbles* Thank you so very much for your kind words, reviews like that mean so much to me! *hugs tightly*
January 24 2006, 00:17:20 UTC 6 years ago
I like the additions; they work well. The ending is perfect too. As before, seeing Draco like that after Harry's death is just the best thing ever (in a sad, depressing kinda way). I don't know if it's because I don't expect it, or because I want it to be like that, but it just makes me love this so incredibly much. It has such a fitting perspective, how Harry isn't even mentioned, how we know that so much has happened, and that the war is over and everyone knew about them and that they're no longer the center of attention. It just leaves so much for us to think about and to wonder.
Probably one of my favorite things ever, if you couldn't tell from before. ♥
January 26 2006, 15:34:39 UTC 6 years ago
Thank you so much, dear! ♥♥
Maybe it's the historian in me, but I'd really like to know what the wizards in, say, two generations know and think about Harry... mustwriteafic...
January 24 2006, 23:57:01 UTC 6 years ago
Roses are Red (h/d) - love lasts forever
I'm incapable of being as eloquent as those before me - but love, you've done it to me again. I loved this story desperately when I first read it last year (wow, has it gone by so fast!) and even more desperately am I in love with it now. The emotion you invoke is just... *breathless* so beautiful.*puts it in her memories so she shan't lose it again*
January 26 2006, 15:36:33 UTC 6 years ago
Re: Roses are Red (h/d) - love lasts forever
Thank you so much, my dear!! ♥Ye-es, almost unbelievable: it's been a year ago...
March 12 2007, 02:29:25 UTC 5 years ago
you've always loved our boy draco haven't you? and that third person pov [*smiles*]
nicely done dearest.
March 12 2007, 02:32:38 UTC 5 years ago
March 12 2007, 21:12:13 UTC 5 years ago
As if Draco could ever love anyone else, the poor baby. *pets him*
I do have a fondness for outsiders' POVs...